Ladies, I wrote this poem for this girl, do you think she will like it? What would you add or change?

When I see you, your eyes have me mesmerized. Like looking at a falling star, wishing I could stare longer. Your body flows like a waterfall bending over the earth and giving life to the fire of my lust for you. The hypnotizing lure of your voice echoes in my head, in my dreams, like autumn rain hitting my windowsill. I think about running my hands through your celestial midnight hair, staring into your eyes, and telling you how much I want you, how much you make this primal feeling rise in me. When I see your smile, it’s like seeing a rainbow a warm sunny day, the kind where you smell the sweet scent of dew in the air, and the trees gently sway in the wind. If I could see you just for a second, I would melt into myself, dripping with the desire I have for you. If only I could feel your embrace, a fantasy that would be like flying to the moon watching the world slowly turn, as you turn and turn in my dreams, in my mind, in my fantasies.